tangled

[pandoragoddess]

for as long as this world has been going
around an axis,
that is how long i have spent
in bloom in lieu in waiting
in dreaming escaping
anticipating someone like you

the thought of your eyes never
crossed me until yesterday--
i always fall for boys with brown eyes
i never understood that and i've never
been so touched as i have by your smile
the way you loop your letters when you write

i didn't think i could touch this
not until now,
but your face keeps moving on like the
lineup of a parade
and i admit
i'm afraid of being lost in you
somewhere along the line
and if our hearts tangle like a pair of shoelaces
i'm asking you to promise not to untie the bows

[Tortuga]

pandoragoddess,

I absolutely love the way your poem ends. What a wonderful image to be left with! Great job.

Tortuga

[Asphodelle13]

Clever poem :) , I love your similes, how you compare things to love...you're a very creative writer...do you ever show anyone your poems?...you have a unique voice in your poems, keep writing. 8)

[pandoragoddess]

hmm, the only place they are displayed is on my website. :) along with my digital art and my photographs.


thank you :)

[Laya]

I really loved this poem! the similes was fantastic and the entire poem completely draws you in!!!!!