Painting doesnt look right

[Riv]

I'm doing this massive painting of a booty for the 'body seperation' project in my art class deal im takin at the college here.. so anyway I have this big ol 2 1/2 by 3 foot painting of an ass AND SOMETHING LOOKS VERY WRONG WITH IT. Aside from the fact that its a huge butt. For some reason the picture doesnt flow and I cant figure out where exactly I fucked up. Anyone see somethin i could change in here to make it look right?? I've been thinkin of completely redoing the colors and making everything shades of blue and green and purple with some red... Anyway here it is. *btw its oil paint*

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v493/Riv/162de158.jpg

[Wolf]

The bum is too pointy and it looks like it's trying not to let a turd through.

/vulgar.


No easier way to say it.

[Riv]

hmmm... not sure what to do about the turd issue *LOL* but I guess I could try roundin the ass more and changin the position of the legs. Thanks!
I'll post a new pic in a few days when i change it.

[Caramel Apple Pop]

The part that looks weird to me is where the thigh turns into the butt .... I think maybe the transition isn't natural looking enough, maybe try to make it less obvious, make it so the upper thigh and the start of the butt blend in more?


hm.. just my two cents.

[Riv]

K... The new painting is basically the same thing, only it shows no lower thigh, alot of lower back, and the ass isnt as 'pointy'.. Wont be finished for a few days but when I am I'll post a pic so if theres still somethin that someone notices doesnt look right they can let me know.

[samanthaj_i]

I know this is probably too late to say anything because you've either changed it or have redone the entire thing. The ass isn't pointy at all, its perfect. Where the leg begins under the ass on the left leg if you notice the butt cheek is higher than the one on the right, making the woman look as if she's has all the weight on her left leg rather than equally or on her right, thats why it looks odd. Second the colors you chose are too red and blue, looks as if someone literally smacked her ass over and over until it was bruised. May I suggest, a little less red and blue and tint the red with yellow and orange with blue, it will even it out a bit for the areas that look bruised and for the darker area in the middle there, shouldn't be that dark, tone down a bit. Third the casting of her shadow is off. If you look, you've got her all distorted in the shadow, make the shadow less intense and focus on the silhouette of the body, not just the behind. Fourth, it may help to make the bikini less intense, maybe a softer color would balance it out because the stark black makes the entire body look too cold or not there, the black overpowers the body and all you get is the black bikini and can't really look at the rest carefully enough for a good evaluation.

These are just some ideas of how to change it or revamp, doesn't mean you have to take any of this into consideration. Just thought you might want a professionals opinion; I have two jobs I work as a temp which is ok, but I write and paint which is a blast. I sell my paintings in gallerys and thought it would be nice to give some advice from one artist to another.

[Cashew]

I'd comment, but all I see are x's, hon! :(

[Riv]

Yeah... All my pictures on my photobucket account thing dissapeard. But heres the painting. Its not the whole thing, its bigger than this but i didnt see the need to show the WHOLE thing when most of the focus is on this area and this was the part that didnt look right. It's still 'strange' but its supposed to be.. I completely agree with the comment that it looks 'bruised' but it seemed to look funnier any other way. The aim was for fucked up lighting and shadows *something about making it all look 'disconnected'*, too, and that weird little white spot is to show the curve of the back, because without it the back seems to melt into the darkness and I didnt like the look... Either way, cant fix it up anymore. Due in a day :wall: damn it. But its good enough I guess the instructor liked it and its not like I'm gonna keep the damn thing.

Thanks for all the suggestions though :biggrin:

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v493/Riv/ee391166.jpg

[Cashew]

... I see no problem with that. :) I LIKE the colouring, and the shape looks fine to me. Nice work! :biggrin:

[kuju]

the butt is disproportionate to the waist... it's like a super thin girl with a huge ass.

or... she could be one of those girls with horrible posture who juts out her chest trying to compensate for her miniscule breasts, but doesn't realize that in the process she sticks her ass out as well, magnifying it more than she does her breasts...

[Asphodelle13]

I kinda like the butt..lol its really bubbly.:P But yeah, the waist needs to be bigger. And I think the black of the underwear is a bit harsh.

[sweet-one]

The girl does appear super skinny with a huge ass. Reminds me of my own bubble butt... *ahem* anyway. The painting is nicely done though, and you have done good work with the light and shadow stuff.

[The Sage]

that butt would look good bent ove........ oops. ;)