Shrouded Dreams

[Asphodelle13]

I'm not depressed as this poem conveys..:P Just thought I'd share my darker views on love.



Love was never meant for me
Its just that hidden path away
Not meant for earthly feet to trod
Where old daffodils turn to gray

True love can never find me
As my lone self boards the plane
His departure unseen in a crowd
Where untouched dreams remain

Real love cannot reveal its truth
It always revels in trickery
With no walls to split up love from lies
Fate knows the joke’s on me

Love was never meant for me
I’m its martyr of a lost belief
Drifting dead within a wasteland
Searching madly for love’s relief.

[Asphodelle13]

Okay I revised it...






Love was never meant for me
Its evermore the road not taken
Not meant for earthly feet to trod
A secret garden long forsaken

True love can never find me
My shriveled shadow can't attain
His soulful eyes amongst the crowd
Where untouched dreams remain

Real love cannot reveal its truth
Instead it revels in trickery
With no walls to split love from lies
Fate knows the joke’s on me

Love was never meant for me
I’m its martyr of a lost belief
Drifting dead within a wasteland
Searching madly for love’s relief.

[nicruns]

i like the rhyme schme you did in the revised version better.

[Tortuga]

I, too, like the revised version better. When I was reading the first one, I thought the fourth line was a bit out place--I love the line you replaced it with, though!

Tortuga