Come inside

[Minimus]

Tweaked, I shriek
Another little Freak
Shadows upon me
Its waiting on me
twisted I sit
mold rotten pit
against the wave i rot
all of us forgot
only way to see
is from inside me

Drift away on ice
nothing will suffice
crack blood within
some little pin
against cold floor
dirty tramp whore

ten minutes away
just another day
crash burn within
strapped on a whim
bleed turn gag
head inside a bag
gloat anger fun
the fun has just begun.

/end poem



To me, each paragraph represents a person, in a given situation with something happening to them. I'll let you guys brainstorm on their problems. Tell you guys my thoughts in a couple days.

[vampbarbie]

To me the whole poem screamed rape...I have no idea if thats actually right though.
Its good, though unsettling.

[Asphodelle13]

Nice rhythm you have going here...though I'm still not quite sure what the 'story' is behind each paragraph. Please do enlighten us though. :cool2:


(Oh and feel free to reply to any other threads too) :P