Last Poem

[4LetterWords]

You’re my best friend, You’ve helped me live
You’ve given me everything that you could give
You’ve dried my tears when I was scared
You hugged me just to show you cared
You’ve fought with me once in a while
You’ve acted dumb just to see me smile
But now that you’re so far away
It’s hard to see you everyday
I’m watching my life crumble down
It’s so hard when you’re not around
I guess what I am trying to say
Is that even that I’m here today
I can’t promise I’ll be here tommarow
So don’t linger on the pain and sorrow
Do your best, live your life
Forget this memory and strife
If when you wake up, I’m not there
Don’t cry for me, keep me in prayer
Even though my body’s gone
You’ll feel my warmth from dusk till dawn
I’ll kiss your forehead while you sleep
I’ll dry your eyes when you weep
If you feel the wind blow through your hair
That’s me showing you I’m there
Because you’re my best friend, You helped me live
I’m sorry to live you, and I hope you can forgive

[Asphodelle13]

The point of view in which this poem is told is interesting. I think that the need for an almost singy-song rhythm kinda takes away from the emotions that should be conveyed. Its still very heartfelt, nonetheless. *hugs* Keep writing.:cool2:

[cc-crazed]

I like it. Whats some of the background behind it?
Im surprised how well it flowed. The only line that threw me off was "Forget this memory and strife". Didn't really fit. Besides that- good job.

[4LetterWords]

I wrote it a while ago to my best friend when I was not in a good stage of my life.