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rabidcowfromhell
March 18th, 2003, 03:14 AM
With you around
Reality is like a home movie
Making me remember the good times
When things were simple
And the biggest care
Was people playing friendsies
At hand ball.
And yet
You are like mercury
Dangerous but beautiful
Untouchable, but irresistible
Like a cool sting
Painful
But the nice kind of painful
You
Are like a warm summer day
Back in grade school
When school’s out
And all you do all day
Is play tag and have fun
Great. Fun. Beautiful.
You.

Truth
March 18th, 2003, 11:25 PM
very nice Will... very drifferent from your usual rhyming scheme...

i really enjoyed this line though


Dangerous but beautiful
Untouchable, but irresistible
Like a cool sting
Painful
But the nice kind of painful

RighteousNemesis
March 20th, 2003, 11:47 PM
Will, I love it. The breaks in rhythm emphasize the rest of it. I'm glad you've finally moved on past Josie... but let's not dwell on the past. Good luck with the current girl, and keep up the good writing!