To my future mother-in-law

[BabyDiva]

I never dreamed it would be like this,
That in my life you'd become more,
More than just my old choir director
More than just the Sunday School teacher,
More than just a person who helped
To pull a shy little girl
From her shell-
Just by saying simple words,
By simply showing you really cared.
In God's plan, I'm sure
He knew the way things would change,
Though neither of us would have ever thought.
You've given me so much more
Than someone to look up to since I was young.
You've given me the greatest gift,
A love to last for all my life,
But more than simply that.
You've granted me something
Known by all too few
Because through your life and through your love,
I've come to realize:
Now instead of just one mother,
I feel like I have two.

[ArRoWLeGeNd]

very inspiring poem :) , if you wouldve used doth and thou i would have confused you for a romantic poet :P

have you already given this to her or are you planning on giving it to her....?

~ArRoWLeGeNd~

[BabyDiva]

haven't given it to her yet - planning on it sort of. I'm still unsure. I'm touchy with sharing poetry to people I know. It sort of scares me.

[dulcinea]

yeah, it scares me too... Dunno if you had a plan as to HOW to give it to her, but in case you didn't, I was going to suggest getting her a nice card and writing the poem on the inside of it. That's always cool. :P

[BabyDiva]

Good idea. My sweetie was just like "well, HAND it to her" - he doesn't fully understand it.

I love his mother like my own. I couldn't bear if something I did was "childish" or "foolish" to her.

[Deidre]

It's very sweet, and I'm sure she'll love it. I like how it changes in the end, how you're not quite sure what will come of it.

The poetry critic in me wants to comment on one thing, though (it's nothing personal; I've been a member of various poetry societies since I was 11, so that's almost 7 years of reading and commenting on people's poems... and just as I slacked off as a hobby, I have to do it once or twice a week in school as well); the flow and rhythm.
I can't for the love of me get it to flow. I could pinpoint a lot of little things I'd have changed, words I'd have replaced, to let it flow and soften it, but it wouldn't be your words, so it's not something you really should change. Sincerity and directness might be your best bet here (not something I'd do, but then again, I'm not you, and we all have different ways of doing things). :)

Well, it was very sweet.

[Truth]

i have to agree its very sweet... however the flow of the poem tends to break here and there.. no offense.. some parts flowed better than others... just my opinion, but well done poem anyway

[BabyDiva]

Well - I gave it to her this past weekend.

It went over wonderfully! She was elated, and I think we bonded more over it. After she read it she hugged me tighter than she ever had before...and nearly cried.

I'd say that was a good thing:-D

today she said she felt like she had another little girl around (she still calls her 23 year old daughter a little girl)

[dulcinea]

yay! glad to hear that it was a success :mrgreen: