All I have is memories

[obsidian]

This is my first attempt at writing, I was inspired last night while listening to a CD. What do you think? Any comments or criticisms you have would be great

All I have is memories

I lay on my bed
Eyes closed
Alone in a darkened room
Just some music for company

As I listen
My mind starts to wander
Strange landscapes of sound and colour
Created within my mind

Falling deeper into the experience
I find myself gliding gently
Through shimmering clouds
Swirling in time to the music

For a few moments I'm distracted
Caught up in a mesmerising soundscape
My eyes struggling to take it all in
My ears filled with multiple layers of sound

I land gently on a strange surface
A fine silver sand constantly moving
Mountains appear to rise and fall in the distance
Growing and fading rapidly

I start to walk with no clear direction
I meet a girl, a girl I once knew
A vivid memory of something that meant so much
I reach out, but she begins to fade

Sadness stirs inside me
A dull ache at first
Gradually intensifying
Until a tear rolls down my cheek

The songs change
Becoming darker, more menacing
Sadness turns to anger
A feeling of loss grows deeper

A heavy beat thunders through the landscape
The sand moves beneath my feet
My body propelled into a dark sky
The ground sinks and I am gliding again

Thoughts race through my mind
Spurred on by the rapid shifts of the music
Constant questioning clouds my thinking
Questions I cannot answer

Amid the chaos of an uncontrolled mind
A strange peace washes over me
I feel myself becoming a part of the music
Allowing it to free me from the confusion

Mesmerised I let myself go
I drift through each song
Letting the music influence my mind
Emotions subside, replaced with a peaceful bliss

The music ends
I try to hold the images in my mind
Reality replaces imagination
Sadness stirs again

I lay on my bed
Eyes closed
Alone in a darkened room
All I have is memories

Sleep washes over me
I embrace it gladly
Another chance to dream
Another chance to escape

[Truth]

Rich.. that was goood... You told a great story... I could feel the unstabililty, the pain and the conflict... and this was my fav passage



Sleep washes over me
I embrace it gladly
Another chance to dream
Another chance to escape


you did great for your first time writting.. I suggest you continue it.. Great work..

[Danae]

Hmm...good poem. I'm gonna be a grammar nit pick tho :P


The title should read "All I have are memories".

[obsidian]

Thanks Carlo, your comments are much appreciated :) I may write again, but I'm not sure...this one just kinda flowed from me. As you've probably guessed, music is a great inspiration for me, but the other emotions/feelings come from recent experiences...

Trust Linds to pick out the grammar flaw :P I knew "are" was the correct word to use, but I dunno..."is" seemed to flow better...to me atleast.

[Truth]

i believe the word is in his title seems rather fitting.. as rich pointed out.. it flows out better.. and you are very artistic in knowing that.. it is something i would do aswell....


also, i think the wrod is in that title seems to give it a type of uncertianty when you read the following poem.. that's my thoughts..

[ArRoWLeGeNd]

that's really great for your first one :)

i can acutally say that i have experienced somethin like thta before, i guess that's why i can relate to this piece better. i got a lot of emotion out of it, and i liked how it started off calm, then went to chaos, then back to calm, kinda reminds me of a song i know... :)


~ArRoWLeGeNd~