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jungAH
June 21st, 2002, 03:47 PM
This is by somebody in my forum, SerenePoets (SP)... I really really REALLY loved it, and I just wanted to share it with everybody here. I know it should prolly go in the Writing forum, but this isn't really about relationships or to a certain person anyway... please read!!! Thx! And replies and comments and criticism would be greatly appreciated by the both of us :wink:


one pen scratches the blank paper
kissing the gentle autumn leaves
leaving a trail of auburn tears
as though streaks of sun were stained

tainted lyrics touched by unknown
depths of demons who touch our ankles
with bubbles carrying secreted answers
and our voice dies with our wind

pious roams with its brother unhappiness
for our sister love is buried beneath tactics
waiting for the day of lovely grace
and we disdained reputed despised

could it be we face our truths alone
like a lone word standing on edge
in line like tin soldiers
and swords pierce our hurtful soul

shadows unlike it's dear dark
mixing with nocturnal sleep
as i aught it were stalking
a piece of twine bounding together

dealing with the scratches we encounter
the quota of our hearth
dwindling the stream of life
as though a tidal wave was upon us.

---[by "Musey"]---

Truth
June 21st, 2002, 04:08 PM
uh, oh....I think this is in the wrong forum...it supposed to be in Writings on the Wall you silly...:P

jungAH
June 21st, 2002, 04:21 PM
*guilty face* I know... but then no one would read it, since barely anybody ever goes...

Truth
June 21st, 2002, 04:23 PM
^

mmm, i think the mods are going to get you for that (but I will protect you)...besides, they will move it anyway.....sorry....

Danae
June 21st, 2002, 11:22 PM
I'm coming for you Grace! hahah nah


nice poem :wink:

Klounn
June 22nd, 2002, 01:57 AM
i agree... that was very nicely written... congrads to Musey!!!!

btw... was it only COINCIDENCE that it mentioned Truth and Grace.....

jungAH
June 22nd, 2002, 07:02 PM
i agree... that was very nicely written... congrads to Musey!!!!

btw... was it only COINCIDENCE that it mentioned Truth and Grace.....

puahaha... actually I never even noticed till you pointed it out!

*cheeky grin*

This person doesn't know me well enough to know about anything to do with Truth/Carlo... ^.^ Interesting observ. tho~

Truth
June 25th, 2002, 02:37 PM
i agree... that was very nicely written... congrads to Musey!!!!

btw... was it only COINCIDENCE that it mentioned Truth and Grace.....

puahaha... actually I never even noticed till you pointed it out!

*cheeky grin*

This person doesn't know me well enough to know about anything to do with Truth/Carlo... ^.^ Interesting observ. tho~

Truely a great poem...thanks for sharing with us Grace...and yes that is an interesting observation about the poem mentioning grace and truth....

coincidence, i think...maybe..???


waiting for the day of lovely grace

for some reason I liked that line alot.. :mrgreen: