Written after 9/11

[BabyDiva]

What will you tell
Your children
When they read the stories from
Today?
How can we explain unspeakable horrors
To those so innocent and pure?
They'll read the stories someday
In history books at school.
Will it mean anything to them?
Or will it be just another lesson,
Another picture upon some page?

What will you tell
Your children
When they ask abou today?
Will you recout the story
Of innocence that was lost?
Can you look upon their youthful faces
And make them understand
What was lost that day?
Will you remember places and times
To speak of yesterdays before?

What will you tell your children
When they ask about today?
Will you recount with tears
The story of the innocents?
Of children,wives, mothers, husbands
And of fathe who never said
Goodbye?
Can you speak of the President
And his tears shed for what is gone?
Of the candles, tears and
Silent skies,
Bearing the marks of
Our grief, our tragedy?

What will you tell your children,
When they ask about today?
Will you recount the living legacy
Of the brave who tried with all their hearts
To recover survivors from the
Silent, smouldering rubble
Only to find death under every piece,
A lifeless body instead of a ray of hope for
Those missing ... lost?
Could you even mention the valor
Of those who strived to serve a higher goal
Only to find their lives to be the price?
Will you say with words unshaken
How we all tried to do our best?
Can you say with a firm voice
We did all that we could?

What will you tell your children
When they ask about today?

[super_chevy2000]

This is very pretty and well written.

[Truth]

very nice poem and very fitting for its subject...

[heartbrokenbaby]

:o Good poem we deffently needed a poem like that and it was very well written :wink:

[LuckyRiverJordan]

great poem. brings back a lot of emotions...

[*pOpuLaR~pRiNcEsS*]

great poem. brings back a lot of emotions...

Yep... it made me cry! :cry:

Just imagining the panic and chaos that those poor innocent people in the Twin Towers and the hijacked planes must have felt makes me feel sick. They didn't deserve to die like that. :( Why can't humans learn to stop hurting each other?

[FireFly]

The poem is very well written and my only problem with it was the ending, it felt with the style of the poem but felt very very halted, as if the poem wasnt supposed to end there... Maybe if you changed a few of the end lines to lead up to the ending to make it feel more drematic even though it's predicitiable?

Just a thought...

However on topic, off poem topic is that I feel much more for people who are raped and murdered than the September 11th "terror" attacks. The people in the planes didn't know what was happening, they most likly would have died painlessly.

I know the whole event was tragic and I feel sorry for the people's families etc, that would be aweful, but unfortunately people die everyday... There are bombings constantly in israle and what are the two nuclear powers about to go to war?

Oh also there are people dieing daily of starvation in 3rd world countries and in india it's legal to rape and kill ur family member for premaritual sex.

There are sooo many events in this world happening and where are the poems for the people who are raped daily, or murdered, tortured, humuliated etc??

This is the world we live in.

[BabyDiva]

Firefly,
It's supposed to be left hanging, as if something more is to be coming because there is no telling what is coming next. That's the whole point of my poem, what we will remember about it and what may be to come.

As far as your other questions. Yes, those situations are terrible, and as bad as it sounds to say this, what is going on in 3rd world countries and such is not *my* history...that is why I haven't written about it. Those terrorists were in MY city 3 days before the bombing. One of them layed on a table for massage therepy that I was on only months before. This is why I have different feelings towards the thousands of lives lost that one day.

Also, in those places where they kill someone for premarital sex,you may see that as wrong and terrible, but in their culture it is appropriate. As much as we may disagree with it, that is their belief and we cannot condemn them for it.


BTW, those on the planes KNEW they were about to die...otherwise they wouldn't have been placing those calls to tell loved ones goodbye...wives to kiss their children for them. They knew death was coming. Those in the initial explosion in the trade center didn't know, true...but those who were crushed later, did...and it was agonizing I'm sure. The same is true for the firefighters and police officers who were rescuing when the collapse happened.

People die eveyday, I know that a lot more than I should - believe me on that one. But to have thousands taken within minutes.

I really feel that you're trying to negate the situation - it is for that reason, for those who died that it's worth remembering. Just let the poem stand and don't critcize because it's not a topic you feel is as pressing as others. If you think poems should be written about what means so much to you, then please write them, I'd love to read them.

[FireFly]

Don't get too defensive, I just think it's an over exagerated situation. Had nothing to do with me sorry to say as it's not "my" history. (it's good that you feel for it, and that you wrote about it) but I was just giving my two cents to other sad situations as well.

And no sorry when I said that your poem kind of halted, I didn't mean it felt like it could carry on since you don't know what is going to happen next, I mean that it halted in the wrong way.

It's your poem of course and this is just my opinion so don't get so damn defensive about it. By doing that you're stating that you really don't care about other peoples opinions and thats fine, so before you post a poem put at the top "This is my work I don't want opinions" ok? And I won't reply telling u that I feel like your poem in my opinion halts, rather than finishes.

You should be proud of ur work, but don't be arogent by it.

[*pOpuLaR~pRiNcEsS*]

Just a thought...

However on topic, off poem topic is that I feel much more for people who are raped and murdered than the September 11th "terror" attacks. The people in the planes didn't know what was happening, they most likly would have died painlessly.

Well... unfortunately they knew exactly what was happening in the hijacked planes. One of the passengers called his wife and said they know they were going to die and they were going to try to take the plane back (this was the one that crashed south of Pittsburgh).

Many people were jumping out of the WTC simply because the flames and smokes were too much and they would rather die by jumping than be burned to death. I swear, when I heard that I cried like a baby. I just can't imagine the panic and horror those people in the buildings and the planes must have felt.

Sure, there are people dying daily of starvation in 3rd world countries and in India it's legal to rape and kill ur family member for premaritual sex. I feel absolutely sorry for them, but if you think the death of a few hundreds is tragic enough, then how about the casualty in the the September 11th terror attacks? Thousands of innocent victims were killed and thousands of people were injured. There're children going to bed without one parent or both parents because of what happened that day. What have they ever done to deserve to die like that? The terrible tragedy that happened on September 11th wasn't just a terror attack on NYC or Washington DC, it was an attack on everything civilised that exsits in this whole world and it'll drastically change the rest of this generation's lives and scar the world forever.


There are sooo many events in this world happening and where are the poems for the people who are raped daily, or murdered, tortured, humuliated etc??

My heart also goes out to the people who are starved, raped daily, or murdered, tortured, humuliated, but the terror attack sure has a bigger impact on us than the starvation in the 3rd world countries. Those people in the hijacked planes, the polices and the firemen are heroes because that plant was heading towards Washington and they deserve to be remembered.


If you think poems should be written about what means so much to you, then please write them, I'd love to read them.
Well said, BabyDiva!