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[ckgirl]

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I have this feeling I can't control,
All I want is to have you to hold.
Your sweet green eyes stay on my mind,
And peace in my heart I cannot find,
WHY do you have to be the way that you are,
Can't you see it drives us so far?
What would it be like to hold your hand?
I want to be with you in this fantasy land,
The sound of your voice echoes in my ear,
And I want so badly just to have you here,
To have you forever right by my side,
Because the pain I feel I cannot hide,
What can I do for you to give this a try?
Would you run and laugh if I began to cry?
Or would you take my hand and kiss my cheek?
The answers to my confusion I try to seek,
All I want is to be with you,
God, please help me make this dream come true!

[Truth]

I did not think your poem was corny. I thought is very well written....Great work.

[ckgirl]

Thanks Truth, I'm glad you liked it!! :wink: :wink: :D :D

[Truth]

Thanks Truth, I'm glad you liked it!! :wink: :wink: :D :D


aww, shucks....


::Truth looks down and kicks foot around in embarassment:: :oops:

[ckgirl]

aww, shucks....


::Truth looks down and kicks foot around in embarassment:: :oops:

lol :lol: :lol: :lol:

[FireFly]

Yeah I like the way it reads and flows and the words and meaning behind the questions.

Not corny at all, keep posting :)

[heartbrokenbaby]

I liked it it was good Im sure everyone can realte to this in ways. It flowed really well and i didn't really see any mistakes