Your touch

[Truth]

I wrote this rather quickly and am not sure if it needs more or not. I tried to put alot of passion into it but seems as if it still lacks, and opinions or suggestions will be taken very appreciatevly :mrgreen:


Your touch

Your touch sends me in a spiral
a yearning wich is undescribeable

how did you do this to me
now i ache for you, can't you see

your kiss starts to burn my soul
all this and no where to go

skin on skin, touch by touch
i realize this is what i want so much

take me into your arms and feel my soul
hard felt passions and never let go

look into my eyes and never release your gaze
my heart races through a complex maze

i am yours to keep, yours to love
and in return we will reach for stars above

never look back, and never regret
this is a time, a time that was meant

the scent of your hair
starts my desires to flare

the shimmer in your eye
sends me far and high

the softeness of your lips
taken to this, i am in bliss

and the tenderness of your skin
so soft so warm, makes my mind spin

why is it this way
i can not take it anymore
i need to have you
who knows what is in store

forgive me, if i desire you so
but it is my only way to give peace to my soul

be with me, come hither
together we will live life forever

until the end of time
until my dying day
this is what i want
passions and desires will never go a stray

[ckgirl]

Wow, I really liked that poem!! I felt like I was reading my own thoughts because that is Exactly the way I am feeling about somebody right now... :o :o :o :o :-?
Except for some spelling errors I saw, the poem was really good. Good work!!! :wink: :mrgreen:

[Soulfull_ Angel]

that was beautiful. Reminds me of the way you feel when you first start falling in love with a person. How you crave them all the time and how every little thing they do sends your heart a flutter. I liked it

[heartbrokenbaby]

Good job i liked it you wrote this very well I know how you feel in this poem i guess one reason why I understood it so well is cause I can relate to it great work :mrgreen: :o

[Truth]

I am so glad....that all of you like it...I just felt that there is still something lacking. Like there was not enough emotion behind

[geckosnipp]

:roll: :roll: :roll: <---...~blink~....jaw drops.

Snipper is speach less cause of this poem so ill have to speak for him. We both think this is a VERY beautiful poem and it you were my GF id kiss you on the spot (his GF would never write him poetry :( ) But we think this is one of the best poems ever written and all we can say is way to go! We simpky love it!

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[heartbrokenbaby]

I felt they had a lot of emotion behind this poem I don't think thats what it is lacking but then again it is your poem and how you feel :D

[Truth]

We both think this is a VERY beautiful poem



Thank you so much. I am glad that you guys like it so.




and it you were my GF id kiss you on the spot

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